New Work: “The Consequence of Liking Girls” Chapter 17

It’s been a busy couple of weeks, but I’ve finished chapter seventeen and you can read it here. It’ll go through changes, but for now, I’m focused on getting the first draft of the entire story finished.

As always, any feedback is appreciated. With any luck at all, I’ll have some more for you to read very soon.

Happy Writing,

  • Good work! Enjoyed it. The only thing that stood out to me was an instance in which 2 different characters use the same colloquialism (I think that's what it would be considered) "passing the blame around" which seems a little redundant and/or like they have the same "voice" (you), which I don't believe to be your intention. Keep up the good work!

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